Tuesday, March 4, 2008

Change version 2

I woke up in the morning the bright glazing sun in my eyes
We went to the park like we always did in the hot dreary summer
Only six years old looking up at the monkey bars
Long and narrow sitting still in the air breathlessly waiting to be hung on
Then I leapt high into the air like a crow flying higher and higher into the big blue ocean in the sky
But I forgot the most crucial part of it all to grab a hold of one of the bars that was suspended into the air
and I fell all the way to the ground and heard my bone cracking from the socket in my arm
Hanging there like a broken branch on a tree swinging from the wind
After that I had the long way back home across a sea of cars
When I got home I just layed there on the couch waiting to go to the doctors
After I went to the doctors I got a blue coffin like thing to keep my arm in till it would go back together and be fine again

1 comment:

mr.e.man617 said...

This is good. I like how there's more description in this one.